Crumbling sandcastle left by the shore
Remnants of forgotten long ago's
Old memories linger, frozen in time
And I break, I break like before
Sand slips through my fingers
And these hands refuse to hold on
But old memories linger, frozen in time
And I break, I break like before
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Ok I've used what others told me from my previous question about this poem and this is what I came up with. This is the URL for the old version: http://answers.yahoo.com/question/i…
Anyway tell me what you think. And thanks to those who helped me fix it!
Ooops the link doesn't word, sorry. Here's the old poem:
Crumbling sandcastle left by the shore
Imprints of forgotten long ago's
Cold memories linger, frozen in time
And I break, I break like before
Footprints wash away like dirt
On hands that refuse to hold on
But cold memories linger, frozen in time
And I'm broken, forever broken…
Bravo, and thank you for mentioning any who helped, no matter who they might be. You show CLASS in that action.
Works for me, now.
Steven Wolf
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