Hi i have to write a short story for school and im kind of stuck. This is what i've wrote so far (please keep in mind it's a draft and still needs editing) well here it is:
Benjamin woke with an ice cold start, his lips were trembling he was cold. The dark alley way laid dim and gloomy before his eyes, snow was falling like rough waves crushing before the ocean shore. His dirty archaic rag resembling nothing but pitiable hygiene, his most treasured possession lay before him in his pale white ghostly looking hands, it was nothing distinctive yet it carried a rather unusual mist with it. The air seemed chilled yet painful as if sharp daggers were being pressed before his throat, Benjamin couldn’t breathe, he clutched his left hand just before his heart and placed his right hand firmly around his golden locket, the locket of his grandfather, Victor Santiago, it was gold plated and enclosed small diamonds surrounded by emeralds with the initials V.S engraved on the reverse.
Benjamin staggered upwards and made his ways through the soundless vacant streets of Petersburg, it was generally know as a picturesque city with such beautiful scenery, however were Benjamin was it was completely opposed, there was litter lying everywhere, gangs lurking around street corners mugging people, small rundown apartments looking as if almost no life existed. Benjamin felt lonely, abandoned, no one really ever understood Benjamin.
There was only one reason he kept on living and that was because of a young beautiful girl by the name of Yvette, she was a daughter of a wealthy merchant, she has long auburn coloured hair which was vibrant and lit up the world around her, she had deep blue eyes the colour of the ocean at it’s best, her skin tanned, she was elegant in every way. The only problem was Yvette ostracized people such as Benjamin, she hated their presence, their appearance the awful stench left behind them as they passed by, yet Benjamin was different. He always strived to do his best kept himself tidy and clean.
I was thinking of making Benjamin fall in love with Yvette but she rejects him and he gets murdered somehow due to the locket. But this has been done so many times i really need to know if this story is good and how should the plot unfold thx so much 
I love your setting and the way you describe things with such details! If this is the starting of a book, I would have bought it long ago! However, I don't really like the idea of Benjamin getting killed.. Maybe a group of kidnappers from other areas came to kidnap Yvette to ask for money ransom.. And Benjamin saw it, and came rushing to save her.. And Benjamin would crept into the house where she was kept and fought with the kidnappers.. And the story goes on… Hope it helps!
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